tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8469682407918933060.post2484835141210507790..comments2023-03-24T09:16:40.805+00:00Comments on Late In the Day: Uninspired Poetry 3Cloverhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16542742253032170846noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8469682407918933060.post-5190120449381523272011-03-31T18:28:07.836+01:002011-03-31T18:28:07.836+01:00Well, I do <3 it :)Well, I do <3 it :)Crimson Ebolghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09980522480303126393noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8469682407918933060.post-8400515469821804512011-03-31T16:06:36.759+01:002011-03-31T16:06:36.759+01:00I know. :S Line 3 is really out. I'm going to ...I know. :S Line 3 is really out. I'm going to take out 'and' and 'though' for now so that it has a (slightly) better rhythm to it.<br /><br />I really wanted something in the archive for 'March' so that the Blog didn't feel abandoned. It gets lonely.Cloverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16542742253032170846noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8469682407918933060.post-37172227943304928802011-03-30T21:25:02.262+01:002011-03-30T21:25:02.262+01:00Love it. The metre goes a bit out of sync in lines...Love it. The metre goes a bit out of sync in lines 3 and 4 - perhaps it's worth trying to get all lines to have the same number of syllables in order to improve the rhythm. :O)Crimson Ebolghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09980522480303126393noreply@blogger.com